It is a pleasant Sunday, morning. Glittering
sunshine falls in his room so beautifully. It has been about one hour since the
boy woke up and sat on his bed, calmly. Now he turns on the radio and the host
of the show asks: “Good day, extraordinarily! How’s your weekend? Great? I
guess your Bacon taste better than yesterday’s plate?”
Now the boy slowly turns his gaze to the glass
vase; yesterday he put it on the table in living room with a full-blossom of
lilies in it, but no water. He lethargically stands up and walks till he
reaches the vase. He stares at the lilies, once bright and fair. Yet they have
turned into some limp, grey object with offensive pollens: he speaks not. With
a few seconds of stubborn gaze, he throws the vase away as severely he could.
The crushing sound of the vase, both helpless and resistant, is heard. He falls
on the ground, squeezing his head.
It was
obvious: It has been started again. Again, again and again. It would never stop until
he reaches the last moment in life. He
sobbed, trembling with fear, sadness and rage.
Ben Normad, 17 years old, lived in New York City in
States alone. Had brown eyes and hair of same color, he had such long fingers,
often called to be attractive. For most part of his life, Ben seemed nothing to
be threatening his life. Everything seemed to be well organized and tranquil,
except for some—he suffered from being involved in some arguments with his
intemperate and tough characteristic—occasions. However, he did not need much
time to find everything sacredly mashed up. Ben’s life was filled with solid
isolation since he realized his mental disease. He moved to New York straight,
when he knew about his issue, and rarely contacted anybody. He thought nothing,
but a gratitude for having such prosperous family: at least he was able to rent
a three-bedroom apartment without having any financial concern.
His mental issue, which he regarded to be harmful
for others, was a sudden violence; it didn’t matter that there were people or
dogs or objects or something around him. When he became extremely intemperate,
he indiscriminatingly hit surroundings. In this way, he was already beaten his
dear brother, which was a main motivation to separate his life from his family.
Living separately wasn’t worse although not better, but he at least didn’t hurt
his beloved relationships. To struggle with loneliness, he worked himself up to
read, write and think more than before. His efforts did made some achievements
so that he was attending to the online program of renowned university. It
seemed that his life was restoring its ordinary comforts: even a psychology
professional was working with him to save himself out of the mental disorder.
However, his life was confronting another turning
point, which he himself didn’t acknowledge. Having a unexpected flatmate, which
neither he welcomed nor requested, brought such a tremendous change in his
life; which Ben, of course, never recognize at this moment.
To be continued, someday:)
Words I got for my RANDOM character were: Ben/brown eyes&hair, also long fingers/tough personality/17 years old/"not trained"/lives alone in NY and mental issue for problem. "not trained" was Ji Yoon's idea; she thought her character to be a dog, NOT A HUMAN BEING. Thus, I adjusted the word as "intemperate". Hope the word "train" not only includes the meaning of instruction or education, but also some kind of ability to restrain oneself.
The flatmate, not actually appeared in the story, is another female character created base on the random words plus my imagination. Her name is Lyn, favorable and honest girl of age 19. She is a technology genious(which I sincerely envy of) and lives with her grandmother in Paris. She can't sing anymore, which implies a past trauma in her life. My imagination added some more: she used to be a Chinese descendent in Paris, but recently moved to NY for an internship program in university labatory. She had no place to go, and a friend of both Lynn and Ben, Tom (another character I got; has extremely small eyes, has fun personality, 17 years old but a successful businessman, belongs to a weird family and troubled with a romantic relationship), introduces Lynn to Ben and make Ben to share apartment with her.
The remaining plot will end up to be a romance story:) Since both of Ben and Lynn have mental or psychological matters, they will be able to solve the matter by helping each other. Hope I complete this story to be quite long and interesting!
I like all of the passage, but I like the first two paragraphs the most. I thought that though you didn't explicitly talk about how the character doesn't have a mental disorder, you portrayed Ben's problem by describing his actions with great care :)
답글삭제Hi Haryoung :)
답글삭제First of all, I really like your blog name! What does it mean?
While reading, I thought you did a very good job of describing the setting.
However, I thought you could improve on 'how' you describe. For example, instead of listing the appearance of your character in one sentence ("Ben Normad, 17 years old, lived in New York City in States alone. Had brown eyes and hair of same color, he had such long fingers, often called to be attractive.") you could imply them within your story. Also, I thought it would be helpful if you put in more story aspects like the plot and solution. Great job :)